It's going to be a bit I'm pretty slow. not a lot of time for writing and hard to get motivated right now. like a month or 3. if you like I can get you updated previews if you want to chat on discord
thanks! Just having trouble getting into writing along with family being over and being hard to make stories of.. this subject matter while they are here. but thanks!
If you want you can chat me on discord, messege me if you care
Nice Text-based Pick a path, but there are some things I would suggest looking at.
Right now, there are lots of dead ends (which is fine - early access), but you might want to either remove the "this is what will happen" or put them behind spoilers because it kinda ruins the feeling of wanting to come back, after all, you know what is going to happen.
Could I also suggest that you alter some of your paths so they don't really "tell you" what will happen? Right now, when going through it, I feel a little like your choice was pretty much a "spoiler" of your path, and there were no real surprises throughout the story. Also, I notice that many of them keep returning to pretty much the same type of "scene" just a page or two before, so this makes you feel that maybe the choice wasn't essential to start with.
Good writing overall, so I am looking forward to your future work with this.
I found a workaround since I had the same problem: If your browser has an option to right click and select "view frame source", do so, and then on the url, remove everything before https... That will give you a tab where its nothing but the game.
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Is the work going on? If anything, I don't want to rush it, I'm just interested in the "developer's diary"))
I uh. may of gotten distracted. working on another story. I'm sorry! I had an idea to finish a story I had a long time ago.
... my discord chat offer still stands if you want previews / talking faster
When will it be ready? I'm just really looking forward to this story and I'm interested to know at least the approximate dates))
It's going to be a bit I'm pretty slow. not a lot of time for writing and hard to get motivated right now. like a month or 3. if you like I can get you updated previews if you want to chat on discord
I miss you buddy, are you doing all right?
Love you and your stories <3
thanks! Just having trouble getting into writing along with family being over and being hard to make stories of.. this subject matter while they are here. but thanks!
If you want you can chat me on discord, messege me if you care
That's totally understandable 👍
Also yeah I'd love to chat ! My discord is parrot7777
Nice Text-based Pick a path, but there are some things I would suggest looking at.
Right now, there are lots of dead ends (which is fine - early access), but you might want to either remove the "this is what will happen" or put them behind spoilers because it kinda ruins the feeling of wanting to come back, after all, you know what is going to happen.
Could I also suggest that you alter some of your paths so they don't really "tell you" what will happen? Right now, when going through it, I feel a little like your choice was pretty much a "spoiler" of your path, and there were no real surprises throughout the story. Also, I notice that many of them keep returning to pretty much the same type of "scene" just a page or two before, so this makes you feel that maybe the choice wasn't essential to start with.
Good writing overall, so I am looking forward to your future work with this.
... huh. I don't know how to do spoiler tags in this program. that is a good idea.
fair enough although other then the ones where you meat a spefific creature, (hard to avoid) the others seem hard to tell.
I mean going to drive to the car turning into a harpy is hard to guess.
thanks a lot. I have a few other stories btw.
thanks for the preview
thanks! If you have any thoughts, or ideas for what you would do let me know.
I can't scroll down.
Me too...
should be fixed. sorry I shouldn't post right before bed
I found a workaround since I had the same problem: If your browser has an option to right click and select "view frame source", do so, and then on the url, remove everything before https... That will give you a tab where its nothing but the game.
thanks a lot. and yeah it should be fixed to auto do that now and scroll
oops I somehow didn't checkbox the scroll option. my bad fixed